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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extend do you agree or disgree with this stagement.

#people #choices #disgree #stagement
In the present world, it is the belief of many
people
 that we are open to numerous options to choose from. Personally, I completely agree with
this
 school of thought and I will be reasoning my stands in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin
 with, with the continuous development of humankind throughout the past years one can choose from multiple options from the very early stage of life. To be more specific, children of the current world can decide whether they want to attend English medium schools or general schools as there are plenty of schooling facilities available around them while fifty years ago it was not possible to give a
second
 thought about schools as facilities were limited. Again, children or even adults can learn different skills based on their interests simply from online courses which once
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 beyond imagination. Another point worth mentioning is that
people
 are now more independent and
thus
 are more open-minded. Individuals of the present time are mostly career oriented and in most cases decisions regarding some issues like marriage, taking children etc. are taken by themselves whereas in previous years these were something that family members used to decide for the couple.
Therefore
, freedom of choice basically came from financial independency and breaking the conservative mindsets that once were not easily achievable and as a
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result
people
 used to be bounded by social restrictions. To conclude, it can be said that
people
 are now open to diverse opportunities due to the development of facilities over time and gaining freedom from social bindings.
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