Some people want the government to spend more money for looking life on other planets; however others think it a waste of public money when there are so many problems in earth that the government should be solving. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Researching other
planet
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planets
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is one of the most important
problems
that some developed
countries
face.
However
, whether or not these
countries
should spend plenty of
money
on looking for life on other
planets
is a controversial issue. In my opinion,
nations
should resolve their current
problems
. It is obvious that each country has their own
problems
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to be solved. That means
nations
should spend
money
on many important things.
Therefore
, some people think country
who
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that
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spend more
money
and resources to look for other
planets
and research if
their
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has any life
is
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are
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waste
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a waste
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of public
money
. Because
of
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there are so many
problems
on earth and the government should spend time and
money
to
solve
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themsolve
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.
For example
, the government should think about how to improve the public
heath
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health
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standard, how to protect the environment, and how to create more
school
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to increase
public
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educational level.
As a result
, the government do not need to waste resources to look for other
planets
.
However
, others,
they
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believe there
are
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life on other
planets
,
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so
that
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apply
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they want to find it and making
prepare
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preparations
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to migrate there. Due to developed technology, some
countries
have abilities to research other
planets
. At the same time, they noticed the population is increasing quickly nowadays. The problem of
environment
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the environment
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is becoming a very important issue
affect
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people’s health.
Therefore
,
to find
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a planet which is suitable for
people
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people's
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live is necessary. I believe that
countries
should resolve their current
problems
first
.
For example
, protecting the environment, reducing waste gas, creating new energy,
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and increasing
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invest
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in public health. All these methods can let people who
living
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in
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on
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the
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earth feel more comfortable. In conclusion, all
the
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nations
should
spending
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be spending
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public
money
on
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in
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right
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the right
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place. At the same time, developed
countries
could help poor
nations
to improve their standard of
live
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living
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.
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  • thirdly
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  • moreover
  • also
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  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • extraterrestrial
  • terrestrial issues
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  • sustainable
  • philosophical advancement
  • ethics
  • biological diversity
  • technological breakthroughs
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  • humanity's place in the universe
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