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In spite of advantage made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this case? What can be done about this problem?

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It is undeniable that despite the sophisticated practices in agriculture, many nations around the world are unable to feed their citizens. I believe that Trade restrictions are the main cause of
this
 scenario. The Viable solution for
this
 to governments should make easy trade practices.
This
 essay Shall
further
 elaborate in detail in forthcoming paragraphs. The Major cause of
food
 scarcity is because if it is free trade practices
such
 as tax-free and minimum paperwork on import shipments for all kinds of
food
-related products shall boost the import business with these countries easily handling their
food
 demands. Another indirect effect of
this
 is they can export indigenous foods to other countries.
For instance
 in Gambia due to its robust policies on import and export, traders are less interested to do business with
this
 nation as result there is more and more
food
 shortage in Gambia
For example
 in Indian government had made Tax free on their feet and rice imports and less paperwork on exporting oil and corn.
Thus
 India succeeded with its
food
 demands.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • advancements
  • pervasive
  • uneven distribution
  • logistical challenges
  • economic barriers
  • post-harvest losses
  • affluent societies
  • climate change
  • exacerbates
  • food insecurity
  • crop yields
  • political instability
  • sustainable agricultural practices
  • food waste
  • management practices
  • consumer awareness
  • international cooperation
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