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Some people believe that a police force carrying guns will encourage a higher level of violence in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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I disagree with the statement that
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police
force
 would promote a greater degree of violence. A
number
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 of arguments surround my opinion. My
first
 argument to support my viewpoint is that
guns
 would, to a large extent, deter the potential
criminals
'
Police
 officers are those who are responsible for taking care of all the citizens, safety and wearing
guns
 could largely make sure of
this
.
For example
, if someone has the intention to commit a
crime
, he would think twice about doing so if there
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police
 carrying
guns
 on patrol.
Therefore
, the level of violence would decrease rather than go up.
Secondly
,
criminals
 usually have
guns
 and so,
police
 officers need them in order to
control
crime
.
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instead
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Instead
 of taking
guns
 away from the
police
, it is more important to make laws against the general public having
guns
.Countries with weak or ineffective gun laws, or countries bordering
such
 countries, like Mexico which has strong 8un laws, but virtually no way to prevent them from being smuggled over the border from the U.S.,need a
police
force
that is
 not only armed
,
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 but is armed
befterthan
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better than
 the
criminals
. Opponents claim that
police
 in the U.K. are able to go without
guns
 and
also
 have
crime
 in
control
. They have a point but I believe that
crime
 in
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 is under
control
 because they are able to
control
 the flow of
guns
 to the general populace.
Therefore
, I reiterate my point that
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force
 should carry
guns
. To sum up, because
criminals
 can easily come into possession of
guns
,
therefore
 the
police
force
 needs to be armed. Armed
police
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 could never be a cause of increased violence. Nations around the world should hope to someday reach the point where their
police
force
 can afford not to carry
guns
 and still be effective.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • law enforcement
  • escalate
  • deter
  • overreaction
  • perceived safety
  • misuse of power
  • deterrent effect
  • law and order
  • public safety
  • crime prevention
  • civil liberties
  • use of lethal force
  • accountability
  • arms race
  • militarization
  • social fabric
  • statistical evidence
  • cultural attitudes
  • criminal behavior
  • policy implications
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