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Nowadays many people have an unhealthy diet and do not exercise regularly. What are the reasons behind this trend? How can we encourage these people to live a healthy lifestyle?

#people #diet #exercise #trend #lifestyle
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 paper was twofold:
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, by comparing midazolam and non-
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-pharmacological two different interventions; playing with a tablet and watching television to deliver simplified information about
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.
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, to adopt a method that could be a standard for using to decrease preoperative anxiety in children. To enhance evidence-based practice by applying non-pharmacological techniques
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 induction has a positive impact on the child intra-operatively and in the postoperative care unit by decreasing the chance of the occurrence of the sevoflurane-related delirium, which concluded by Uyar, et al.,(2021). Patients’
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 are expected to decrease
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 of their child.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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