In the developed world, average life expactancy is increasing. What problems will this cause for individuals and society? Suggest some measures that caould be taken to reduce the impact of ageing populations.
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paragraphs
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, elderly peoples are more likely to be dependent on Linking Words
youngers
. In the modern days, where everyone has their own tasks to do, it becomes difficult to look after the elderly person properly which induces issues among family members. Correct your spelling
younger
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children
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children
refuse
to do her duty towards elders it may sometimes lead to divorce between couples.
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disabled
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age
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old
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some nations Correct your spelling
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economical activities as a huge portion of China's population Correct article usage
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are
above 80.
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age old
people and to reduce the impact on Add a hyphen
age-old
country's
finance Correct article usage
the country's
government
can initiate crafts like activities for older people so that they can earn some Correct article usage
the government
livelihoood
as well as can remain busy with some tasks.
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age
a person may look like a burden to some extent but Use synonyms
actually
they are an asset and everyone must take proper care of them.Add a comma
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