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Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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In recent years a great number of
people
 who have health problems make an effort to utilize different alternative
treatment
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treatments
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instead
 of administering usual
doctors
. In my
estimation
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 it is profitable to give medicine
from
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to
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doctors
. As far as some
people
, including
me
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,me
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 assert individuals should give advice from
doctors
 to diagnose both health
problem
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problems
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 and treatment properly.
Additionally
, if an epidemic infection is released in a society,
people
 will prefer to give
an advice
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advice
a piece of advice
a bit of advice
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 from
ordinary
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an ordinary
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 individual who
experience
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this
 issue, while in
this
 circumstance patients could not cure, because their diseases might not be diagnosed accurately which lead to serious side effects, because of utilizing un appropriate drugs.
Thus
,
people
 are obliged to give medicine
from
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to
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 qualified
doctors
 who are extremely aware
about
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of
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 different diseases to administer them.
Nevertheless
, some individuals are concerned
people
 could be cured with other categories
such
 as visiting herbal
doctors
instead
 of utilizing a chemical treatment, particularly the elderly tend to be checked
by
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them
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those
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 who are aware
about
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of
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 organic ingredients to give a nutrient prescription
instead
 of chemical medication.
Furthermore
, there are numerous reliable medical resources available which are accessible
for
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 all
people
 around the world
such
 as books and websites and
people
 should be up to date to cure themselves when they get infected with
epidemic
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an epidemic
the epidemic
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virus
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viruses
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 which
are
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is
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 known worldwide
,
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apply
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 because a great amount of money and energy should be devoted to
visit
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visiting
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 a doctor. In conclusion, in my
view
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people
 should give prescription from
knowledgable
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knowledgeable
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doctors
instead
 of visiting herbal
doctors
 and self -treatment which lead to side effects.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alternative medicines
  • treatments
  • positive development
  • negative development
  • health problems
  • usual doctor
  • access
  • personalized approach
  • holistic well-being
  • lack of regulation
  • evidence-based research
  • proper medical treatment
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