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today more and more people are travelling than ever before. why is this case? what are the benefits of travelling ?

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In the present
world
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, the number of
travellers
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 has increased significantly than it used to be in previous years. The
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development
developement
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development
 of transportation and the wide publicity of
tourist
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places
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 are two of the common reasons
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such
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 an increase in
travellers
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 around the
world
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. The subsequent paragraphs will contain more details about the uprise of tourists and the advantages they get through the tours.
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 with, the development of transportation facilities over the years gave human-being great accessibility to
places
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 that once were impossible to reach.
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, modern vehicles not only provide speed mobilization but
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 reduced the costs of travel. People now can afford both time and money to have a tour in a distant place.
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, with the fastest ,aeroplanes individuals can go
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thousand of miles away
places
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 during a week-long holiday and come back within the shortest possible time to attend the office. Another point worth mentioning is that nowadays, tourism has become a great industry where nations put a huge investment to grab
travellers
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 around the
world
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. To be more specific,
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tourist
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a tourist
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 spends a great amount of money while they are on a trip and those expenditures cause currency gain in the host country.
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,
tourist
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 spots get much attention and with the help of the internet
tourist
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 agencies make lucrative advertisements so that visitors around the
world
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 come to visit that
places
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.
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, internet users get tempted by those advertisements and try to
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 for a trip whenever they
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afford
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afford
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.
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, travelling brings many advantages to the
travellers
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 as it broadens their minds with diverse cultures
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 and social and political norms.
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, visiting natural
places
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 keeps people's mind fresh and help them regain the energy that many of us lose with the stresses from the workplace. To conclude, it can be reiterated that the development of modern transport facilities along with tourism industries let people travel more frequently than before.
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