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modern technology has made it easier for individuals to download copyrighted music and books from the internet for no charge

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Public concern has arisen about whether
it’s
 positive or negative development that with the help of modern technology it is less complicated to download copyrighted media from the internet for free. I tend to believe that it has more negative than positive impacts.
First
 of all, the ability to easily download copyrighted
music
 and
books
 for free results in new artists and authors losing motivation to create, because they won’t be making as much money. By having their work stolen, musicians and writers that have just started their careers, don’t earn as much money as they could have if everyone had bought their products.
This
also
 demotivates new artists from choosing
this
 career path
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 fear of financial issues. Another negative issue with stealing copyrighted
music
 and
books
 is plagiarism.
It’s
 way more difficult to determine if the artwork is original and which ideas are stolen. Wrong
people
 are more likely to get credit when the copyright system fails to function.
However
, a positive side is that
it’s
 easier for the general public to enjoy a big variety of
books
 and
music
 for free. Only a small group of
people
 would have access to as much artwork as everyone has now if the only way to get it would be to buy it.
Also
 downloading copyrighted material for free doesn’t obligate
people
 to feel bad for not liking some sort of content. If they had to pay for it and didn’t enjoy what they got it would demotivate them from buying more and
also
 set
people
 in a bad mood for spending money on something they didn’t admire. Having the ability to acquire copyrighted material for free harms the
people
 who created it and opens an easy way for copying media.
On the other hand
,
it’s
 not all bad, because it gives an opportunity for
people
 to enjoy more kinds of
books
 and
music
 without having to pay for them.
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