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In many countries traditional food is being replaced by international fast food. Some claim that this has negative effects on both families and societies. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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People
 often visit fast
food
restaurants
 as most of them live a life at a fast pace and need to work longer hours than before to earn higher salaries nowadays. I believe that the advent of fast
food
 affects family bonds adversely and leads to some social problems. One problem associated with society is that fast
food
 has become a
health
 issue in some countries,
such
 as America, where the number of overweight
people
 has increased dramatically.
This
 is because most fast
food
 is high in fat, sugar, salt, and calories, all of which are not good for
people
’s
health
 if they eat too much fast
food
.
As a result
, those obese
people
 are more likely to suffer from heart disease or some other
health
 problems than normal-weight
people
.
This
 would impose a burden on the medical system of society.
In contrast
, home-cooked dishes are considered to be beneficial to
health
 as
people
 tend to use fresh ingredients and few preservatives when they cook at home. Another issue related to the impact of fast
food
 is that it would pose a threat to traditional cuisine, which normally represents one country’s culture. It is obvious that some traditional meals need a longer time to prepare, especially some Chinese dishes, than fast
food
, which is the main drawback to traditional cuisine.
As a result
,
people
 who live a hectic life every day may tend to choose fast
food
 as their breakfast and dinner. If fast
food
 is always popular with local inhabitants, fast
food
restaurants
 would dominate the market and traditional
food
restaurants
 may disappear gradually, which is equal to the cultural invasion of a country. Eating too much fast
food
 would
also
 be harmful to family relationships.
This
 is because if
people
 often eat out in fast
food
restaurants
,
then
 they may make it become a habit.
As a result
, they are reluctant to prepare or have family meals, which provide family members with an opportunity to communicate with each other and enhance mutual understanding, and
then
 lack of emotional communication would make
people
 find it hard to maintain close family bonds with family members. In conclusion, I agree with the idea that fast
food
 has negative effects on both families and societies. It has the potential to alienate family members from each other and cause some social issues.
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