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In many countries traditional food is being replaced by international fast food. Some claim that this has negative effects on both families and societies. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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People
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 often visit fast
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restaurants
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 as most of them live a life at a fast pace and need to work longer hours than before to earn higher salaries nowadays. I believe that the advent of fast
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 affects family bonds adversely and leads to some social problems. One problem associated with society is that fast
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 has become a
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 issue in some countries,
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 as America, where the number of overweight
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 has increased dramatically.
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 is because most fast
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 is high in fat, sugar, salt, and calories, all of which are not good for
people
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’s
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 if they eat too much fast
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.
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, those obese
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 are more likely to suffer from heart disease or some other
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 problems than normal-weight
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.
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 would impose a burden on the medical system of society.
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, home-cooked dishes are considered to be beneficial to
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 as
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 tend to use fresh ingredients and few preservatives when they cook at home. Another issue related to the impact of fast
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 is that it would pose a threat to traditional cuisine, which normally represents one country’s culture. It is obvious that some traditional meals need a longer time to prepare, especially some Chinese dishes, than fast
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, which is the main drawback to traditional cuisine.
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,
people
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 who live a hectic life every day may tend to choose fast
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 as their breakfast and dinner. If fast
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 is always popular with local inhabitants, fast
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restaurants
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 would dominate the market and traditional
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restaurants
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 may disappear gradually, which is equal to the cultural invasion of a country. Eating too much fast
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 would
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 be harmful to family relationships.
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 is because if
people
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 often eat out in fast
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restaurants
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,
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 they may make it become a habit.
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, they are reluctant to prepare or have family meals, which provide family members with an opportunity to communicate with each other and enhance mutual understanding, and
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 lack of emotional communication would make
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 find it hard to maintain close family bonds with family members. In conclusion, I agree with the idea that fast
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 has negative effects on both families and societies. It has the potential to alienate family members from each other and cause some social issues.
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