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Some people think that economic progress is the only way to measure a country’s success , while others think that there are other factors which can be used to measure a country’s success. what are these factors ? which, of all factors, do you think are the most important ?

Across many nations around the world, it has become clear and evident that there is increased competition between governments in
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 to secure a top place among the top ten best countries in the globe. Some argue that it is the economy of the
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 that gives rise to its
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 whilst many others are against
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 as well as that
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 can drastically influence the way in which a
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 receives its respect. Ranking by
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 should have more priority in
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 to measure a
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's
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 rather than by economy. Services of medicine should
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 promote
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 since it concerns mainly about the safety of people. Moving on to the number of crime rates which
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 plays an important role in a
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's
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 , especially with an insignificant rate might skyrocket the ranking as well.
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, it is evident that politicians are given all the respect and honour rather than employees in the
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 department, athletes or entrepreneurs as well. It's a common fallacy to assume that economy alone doesn't make a
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 more productive. In my opinion, I would consider the
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 department as the most important since medicine and engineering are the building blocks of elaborating
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a
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's wealth.
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, employees in the science department should be encouraged by the Government in
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 to boost one's
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's
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.
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, teachers and lecturers whose notion is to predominantly upgrade their student's skills and promote their focus can be given memorable awards and prizes so that in the future they're more concerned about how to increase the ranking of their
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 and in
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 to secure a place among the best of them. From landing an aircraft on a foreign planet to curing dangerous and deadly diseases and viruses can significantly impact the
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 of its own. To conclude with the opinion that
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 sectors play a masked unique trend that might astoundingly improve the affluent perspective in determining strength and power on reflecting a
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's own
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, many of us do not realize the importance of
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 fact unless we open our books.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gross domestic product (GDP)
  • holistic approach
  • subjective well-being
  • quality of life
  • human development index (HDI)
  • green economy
  • technological prowess
  • social cohesion
  • equality and equity
  • cultural vitality
  • political transparency
  • judicial efficacy
  • civil liberties
  • progress indicators
  • societal prosperity
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