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The internet allows us to stay connected with each other no matter where we are. On the other hand , it is also isolates us and encourages people not to socialize. To what extend do you agree or disagree with these statements?

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The society of
people
 around the world has the option to communicate with each other because of the internet.
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for
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people
 who live far away from their
home
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 and are still in touch with recent news. But
on the other hand
, all of
this
 social media isolates
people
 and keeps them out of socialization. Today
the
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humanity
have
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 got so many apps and
any
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other services for communication. I think
that is
 one of the greatest
opportinity
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opportunity
 to have some friends and find interesting
persons
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 and all of it
lead
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 to results where
people
are
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gain soft skills. But in the other
hand
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 the growing number of social media services is the fact that
people
 become more
social
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 addictive. It`s
very
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 negative side of the internet which needs to be solved as soon as possible.
Moreover
, the
second
consequences
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 is more about social isolation when one person
having
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communicative
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 stoppers or disorders and the main reason is in
image
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 of
fake
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 lifestyle of surrounders. In conclusion, I would like to say that, the internet is only the tool that you can use to find any information.
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