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Some people think computers and the Internet are important in children's study, but others think students can learn more effectively in schools and with teachers. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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A proportion of people believe that studying with the Internet and
computers
 is important, but others believe that studying in schools and with
teachers
 is more effective considering
students
' learning.
Computers
 and the Internet offer unlimited sources and it is easy to reach them but institutions
such
 as schools provide
order
 to pupils and
education
gave
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 by professionals and
this
 option is more beneficial for learners.
Computers
 are invented for doing things easily and quickly. After the Internet development, people started to reach sources and even
to
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each other. As
an evidence
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,
computers
 are basically modified
into
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modern life. With COVID-19, people tend to use their homes to avoid the crowd even from
education
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 institutions. In
this
 circumstance, e-learning would be logical.
Also
,
students
 save
their
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time which is spent on the way
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go
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 and back to school.
Furthermore
,
education
 in proper school buildings
,
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 provides
students
being
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in
order
 and
ensure
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 juveniles to being in contact with each other
face to face
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.
Moreover
,
teachers
 are professional lecturers and educating
by
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them is more effective rather than self-
education
from
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online.
Teachers
are not just give
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 information to
students
, they
also
 find their mistakes and weaknesses, so they could ensure to fix these with their own knowledge and experience. In
order
 that
,
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 in my
opinion
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education
 in schools from
teachers
 are more beneficial for
students
 but we could cross
in
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a path with both online
education
 and formal
education
. Overall, even with plenty of sources, separation from crowds and time
save
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, learning from
teachers
 who are professional lecturers is preferable because of the quality of
education
 and other benefits which are
order
 and communication.
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