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Some parents buy their children whatever they ask for and allow their children to do whatever they want. Is this a good way to raise children? What consequences could this style of parenting have for children as they get older?

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 can prevent dangerous conditions that might happen in the future.
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 to consume the
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 will give many benefits for the
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 to manage a balance in life especially about their education, playing and leisure time.
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 for around 2 or 3 hours per day in the evening or after having dinner could be the best choice for
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. They can use it for searching
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important information efficiently. To conclude,
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unsupervised access to the
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 can lead them to be
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good communication and barrier to protect them from dangerous conditions.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • indulgent
  • entitlement
  • discipline
  • responsibility
  • nurturing
  • self-reliance
  • adversity
  • autonomy
  • validation
  • dependence
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