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It is thought by some that its better to live in a city while others believe that life is better in the countryside. Discuss both side of the argument.

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Some
people
 think that
its
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 better to live in a city rather than
others'
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others
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belief
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believe
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 which is country life is better.
This
argue
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base
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based
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 on the expectations
by
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of
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public
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the public
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 which are facilities, advantages, privacy and peace in
living
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the living
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area
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areas
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.
People
 who are living in the cities have
chance
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a chance
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 to use all facilities already provided by
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government
governments
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the govurnment
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govurnment
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government
 which are garbage services and infrastructures
such
 as
Internet
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 and supplies.
Moreover
, not only the most compelling advantage is being easy to reach those facilities but
also
people
 being in contact with society fast even in their leisure
time
.
Furthermore
, desolation by living in the countryside
ensure
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ensures
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the
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apply
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privacy better than a flat. While considering the cities which
are never sleep
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are never sleeping
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, living out of the
center
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centre
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 provides
noisless
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noiseless
 and
crowdless
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crowd less
crownless
time
 when
people
wants
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want
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 to spend
time
 by lonely or
wants
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want
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 quality rest
time
 after a hard work day. To sum up, both locations for living, give different opportunities and advantages to
public
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the public
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 but differences between humans missout by the
people
 who create
this
 argument.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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