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Some people say that we do not need printed newspaper any more. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Nowadays there is a very common opinion that in modern life we do not have to print news using paper. I absolutely agree with that,
firstly
 because a significant mainstream is saving our planet, including trees which are used for paper production. My
first
 point to prove my view is that a common trend is
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digitalization in all spheres of our life. A good example is the substitution of printed books with electronic ones. We can see a refusal to print everywhere: at Schools and Universities, in huge corporations and middle-size companies, in social institutions and even domestic little stores near our houses. A lot of students prefer to bring to university only one laptop or tablet
instead
 of out-of-number textbooks. Libraries are losing their permanent audience. Most modern people are having at least one electronic device, and more often the younger generation has two or more.
This
 can be explained not only by the low weight of the gadget
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 but by the convenience of using, copying and other actions with text. The
second
 point is the topical problems of ecology. It seems everyone should feel their own responsibility for the current situation. A lot of famous people are trying to convey to ordinary people that reducing the consumption of limited resources is vital for the future of our planet.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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