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Some people feel that punishment should focus more on rehabilitation instead of long prison terms. Others feel prison terms are important for social stability. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Nowadays more and more people think that punishment focuses on
rehabilitation
 rather than long jail. The advocates of
this
 view argue that
the
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 concentrate on
rehabilitation
. Others,
however
, disagree and believe that
prison
 terms are vital for general stability. On the one hand, those in favour of focusing the
rehabilitation
 have a valid reason to be concerned, about the safety and protection of their life. Currently, the need for alcohol
are
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 increasing.
Therefore
 it affects the psychology of
this
 issue production of alcohol should be banned by the government.
On the other hand
, there are many people who would argue that
prison
 terms are more effective to reduce alcohol.
Moreover
, there are other reasons,
firstly
 tellers should be
detentioned
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detention
 in
prison
why
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 they do not crimes. Indeed, alcoholism has increased over the years
subsequently
rehabilitation
 has
the
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 important role
of
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teplers
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tellers
temple
 life in worldwide. In conclusion, there
this
 no need for
prison
 terms generally for society. I do not believe
the
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 decision to
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. I think professionals consider that valid issue which product from alcoholic production and improve
rehabilitation
 over the research.
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