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Some people believe that children should be allowed to choose what subjects to study at school.Others argue that everyone should study the same subjects. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, children's
life
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 place for a large field of discussion between parents where they disagree with the teaching structure. Some argue that children can choose subjects that they have to study at
school
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, while others, support that they are unable to choose which matters would be better for them during academic
life
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 it's a controversial topic, I'm going to discuss both sides in my essay. Fortunately, many parents around the world opened up
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 to provide improvements to the academic structure.
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, according to my experience in Brazil, since
students
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 are from kindergarten to high
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 they have
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 the basic pathway before joining university
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.
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,
students
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 who have been studying the same subject no matter what course will apply for university. In
this
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 case, the solution would be for children to study the same academic grade until the elementary level and as soon as joining into high
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 they choose subjects in search to find a similar way to professional
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, some countries worldwide changed their model of teaching.
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, in Canada
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 have passed up many years studying basic matters
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 as math, English, biology and so,
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, after finishing elementary
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 they can choose what subjects would like to study in high
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. As consequence, nowadays universities and colleges are receiving prepared
students
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.
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, as Canada took
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 important decision,
students
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 have been more prepared to go to University or College. In my opinion, there isn't a correct side, in fact, people are discussing a controversial topic and would be possible to find a balance.
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, I totally agree with
students
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 have more technical teaching in high
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 by choosing matters combined with professional vocation.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • personalized learning experience
  • motivation
  • enthusiasm
  • strengths and weaknesses
  • skill development
  • future careers
  • creativity
  • innovation
  • standardized curriculum
  • foundational knowledge
  • equal opportunities
  • well-rounded development
  • over-specialization
  • broad-based education
  • career options
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