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Today,more than ever, people are traveling and moving to other countries;however,this is usually no easy task.There are many challenges facing potential immigrants, such as extensive paperwork and often a lot of waiting.Do you think it should be difficult or easy to immigrate to a foreign country? Explain.Have you ever thought about moving to another country? What challenges do you anticipate once you arrive into your new country?

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I think every person who goes abroad for once knows how challenging and long it is ,
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 when you arrive and have a great time abroad it is worth it,
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?Anyway,these two cases are quite similar,but moving to another country is more difficult than just going abroad for 2 weeks. In my opinion, it is a really important thing that you must overthink before deciding what to do.If you really want it you must change
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your life like pass the language test, find
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 job and
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 home etc. Definitely, you will have a lot of work to do from preparing documents
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 buying new furniture and it is not easy,but if you really want it it does not matter how many hours you waste calling someone, going somewhere or signing something.Yeah? To be honest, in
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 I really want to move to another country and study there.I have almost 2 years before I need to decide what to do with my future and what university to choose.First of all, I started
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 the information about how to immigrate and what
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 need to do.After
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 I started preparing
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 the uni.Now,I realized how difficult
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 is , but I don’t give up.In my point of view,if you want or need to immigrate you should start preparing for a year and find out what exactly
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documents you need. And you should realize that when you arrive
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 a new country it will be so difficult to get used to,but only the first time,
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 after it will be easier than before, trust me. Obviously, if you know the national country’s language it will be easy to live there.My advice
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 learning
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 or moving are the most unforgettable ways to discover the world and find your place there.Just do it and don't be afraid because everything is possible.
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