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People naturaly resist making change in their lives, What kind of problems can this cause? What solutions can you suggest?

#people #change #lives
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There is no doubt that these days a lot of
people
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 stay in their comfort zone and they would not rather do anything new that perhaps can make their
life
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 more happy and productive, the question is, do
people
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 naturally stand doing transformation in their lives ? in
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 essay , I am going to clarify the problems it can make and the solutions for them . In terms of ,problems
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 are not able to develop their lifestyle or their careers or even their mentality . The main reason given to support
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 claim is that
people
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 do not prefer any adventures or attempt anything new for them to learn it considering we only learn from our experiences and mistakes . To illustrate, I really benefit whenever I make mistakes because I will know what should I do
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 time and I have realised by doing
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 my
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 is beginning to become easier since the knowledge I have it.
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,
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 style of
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 is not an enormous issue that
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 are encountering but I will advise them on some trips it can help them.
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, trying always to take on new adventures .
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, I suggest they attempt new activities even if they are afraid of them the
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 time .
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, by being
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positive person and optimistic their mindsets are going to be more flexible.
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, the ability to change their
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 will be more effective.
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, one of my friends is optimistic and he always looks at any change in his
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 as better for him . In conclusion,
people
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 should avoid the routine in their
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 considering
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 will make them lazy , and in my point ,view it is crucial for anyone to seek and to go out of their comfort zone since
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 could make
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 a special taste.
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