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Some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to make people recycle more is to make it a legal requirement. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #waste #homes #requirement
Honestly speaking I agree with the above
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 that if we want that people start to recycle more we
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 make it legal. I reckon that if the
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 to touch our pockets(
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 money) we will
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 to recycle our waste, but
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 the start that can do.
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, I think they need to work with us and try to put it
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 our culture. I am assuming that it would be hard with the old people as they have their
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stereotypes
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 with the new generation would be easier as how we teach them in their early childhood they will grow up with
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 thoughts. As far as I imagine it is really not enough that at
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 we recycle our waste, we need to have enough bins outside, because most of our time we spend outside,
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 at home, so to speak
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 consider that we have them on every step. I think we live in
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 age when we need to help our planet, and recycling
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waste is one big step that we can right now.
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