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Rich countries should not hire services of doctors, engineers and other experts from poor countries. Do you agree or disagree?

#countries #services #doctors #engineers #experts
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Nowadays, the development of society has led to a gap between rich
countries
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 and poor ones. While some
people
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 argue that rich
nations
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 shouldn'
t
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 hire the
services
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 of doctors, engineers and other experts from poor
nations
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, I am of the opinion that it depends on many factors. On the one hand, it's believed that rich
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 shouldn'
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 hire that
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, it's irrefutable that poor
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 haven'
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 had enough facilities for developing
people
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 so their capacity is not always adapted to the need of rich
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.
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, doctors from the USA can interact with modern learning facilities and
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 have more depth in practice. So their real performance is mostly beyond that of
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 who only consume their knowledge from books and articles only. Not to mention that their curriculum in most case doesn'
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 professional as it is in developed
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.
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, I think that I might depend on lots of factors for some following justification. It's indisputable that many
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 that have talented
people
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 will outweigh those peers who are from rich
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. They may have not knowledge as much as them but their level is much better. Another compelling reason for that idea is that the improvement led to better education in many
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 ,especially developing ones. Cooperation between many
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 brings opportunities for studying abroad for many students. So the gaps are fewer between them. In conclusion,
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 rich
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 should not hire the
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 of doctors, engineers and other experts from poor
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, it seems to me that it depends on lots of things because of the above-mentioned reason.
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