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The diagram illustrates the number of visitors to three different London museums between June and September 2013. Overall, the British
Museum
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 was considered to be the most popular among visitors during the
period
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 in question, while the science
museum
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 was the least visited throughout the
period
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.
In addition
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 to that, the former witnessed a plethora of fluctuations during the
period
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. In the
first
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 half of the
period
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, Natural History
Museum
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 was nearly as popular as the British
Museum
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, with more than 500 visits in the
month
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 of June, before its adulation plunged in the following
month
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.
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, Of the three museums, Science
Museum
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 was the least popular, with the number of visits declining in the following
month
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, July. In the
second
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 half of the
period
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, the adulation of the Science
Museum
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 and the National History
Museum
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 was approximately the same in the
month
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 of September, with nearly more than 450 visits in total.
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, the popularity of the British
Museum
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 rose again rapidly after declining in the
month
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 of August, with nearly 650 visitors in September.

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