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As the number of cars increases, more money has to be spent on road systems. Some people think the government should pay for this. Others, however, think that the drivers should cover the costs. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays,
road
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systems
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 have become more and more important in
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 world due
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 increasing number of cars. Some people think that
government
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 should take
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apply
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responsibility
responsibilty
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responsibility
to
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road
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the road
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 system,
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however
howerver
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however
 other people think that
drivers
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 should pay for the cost. My view is that
government
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 should pay for the
road
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systems
sytems
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systems
 and the
drivers
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 should pay for the
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maintenance
maintiance
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maintenance
. On the one hand, it is obvious that only the
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official
offical
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official
 department has enough money to build a
road
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 system all over the
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.
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 is because the
government
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 get taxes from citizens and some other business and the
government
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 has
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 to use taxes to build roads for the
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.
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, Only the
government
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 has
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resource
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 to build a good transport network around the
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, the
government
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 can do full research and plan better
road
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systems
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 for
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next
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 100 years, which is impossible for individuals. So
government
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 should pay for the rest of
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road
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the road
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systems
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.
On the other hand
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,
drivers
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 have no responsibility to cover the costs.
Drivers
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 already pay a lot of different taxes before they used the
road
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.
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,
drivers
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 need to pay a
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transfer
tansfer
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transfer
 fee when they build a car and
oil
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an oil
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 tax when they fill
petrol
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. So
drivers
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 should not spend anything on building a new
road
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. In the end, I think that the
government
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 need to pay all the money to build good
road
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systems
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 over the
country
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.
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,
drivers
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 no duty to cover the costs as they already pay different kinds of tax before they drove, meanwhile the
government
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 has the right to ask
drivers
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 to pay for some parts of the highway due to maintenance fees. In summary, governments need to make sure that money has been used correctly to build a good transport network for citizens.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • equitable access
  • public service
  • comprehensive planning
  • financial burden
  • user-pay principle
  • traffic congestion
  • encourage sustainable transportation
  • fair distribution of costs
  • direct benefit
  • road taxes
  • tolls
  • revenue
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