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Write a letter to the local authorities for requesting additional sports facilities for your age group in your area. - Mention about the current sports facilities available - What kind of additional sports facilities should be introduced - How the new sports facilities would be of help for the people in your age group

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Dear Officer, I am Mrs Swe Zin Moe. I am 38 years old. I would like to write a letter requesting additional sports facilities in the Woodlands area, especially for my age group. Currently, in my residential compound, there are some courts for tennis and badminton, which can be occupied during the day and night. In these locations, most students are playing at evenings after school time,
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 other working youth are exercising at weekends.
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, some activities ,
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 as a basketball court, a fitness centre, and a swimming pool, should
also
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 be introduced in order to fulfil the well-being of middle-aged people. I fully understand that it might take time to implement the extra projects,
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 I would like to hope that if you provide the gymnastics, at least we can do the physical exercises without transporting to another district. We, as in our 40s, definitely require these installations because they can help the citizens of the same age by motivating our mind and body, and boosting
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 energy as well. Especially, we can reduce job stress and improve our mental health. I am hoping much for your response to my appeal letter. Best regards Swe Zin Moe

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coherence cohesion
Write one clear point in each part. This will make your letter easy to follow.
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Use simple linking words like also, so, and because to join your ideas.
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Answer all three points with a bit more detail and examples.
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Keep the tone polite and steady from start to end.
coherence cohesion
Your letter has a clear start, middle, and end.
coherence cohesion
You use a greeting and a polite closing.
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You cover the main points in the task.
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Your purpose is clear from the first part of the letter.
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