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Some people think that only electric cars should be allowed on the streets by 2040. Do you agree?

#people #cars #streets
This
 is no doubt that smoking has become nowadays increasingly spread habit worldwide.
Although
 smoking leads to lethal health diseases, the number of smokers are grown.
This
 phenomenon is considered a pressing dilemma to be concerned about. In
this
 essay, I will discuss
this
 concerning phenomenon and provide suggested solutions to alleviate
this
 critical issue. In terms of smoking effects, lung cancer is the leading disease caused by smoking. Even cigarette manufacturers label the cancer warning on the product packs. Cigarettes contain toxic elements which can be addictive and harmful.
For instance
, nicotine leads to high blood pressure and increased
heart
 rate speed and ultimately will cause a
heart
 attack. Another side effect that can be taken into account is passive smoking. Breathing secondhand smoke is a high risk compared to non-smokers who stay close to someone who smokes regularly. Exposure to
this
 kind of smoke has immediate effects on the
heart
 and blood vessels that can cause
heart
 attack and stroke.
Moreover
, from a financial perspective, smoking habits deliver to money crises, while a considerable amount of smoker income is spent on offering the required daily need of cigarette supply.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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