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Some people think that the only way to be successful in business is to have a unique product. Discuss if you agree or disagree.

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To maintain success, the
company
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 must have a distinctive
product
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 in the market.
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, a certain number of people believe
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 a key principle of triumph in the
business
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. I do not agree with
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 view, whereas many external factors
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 as marketing and the cost of the
product
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 have a big role in achievement, and hard work and determination of employees are
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 substantial parts of the popular the
company
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.
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 and foremost, the reason behind the unique
product
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 is not only a particular way to achieve success in the
business
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 is to the competition in the marketplace.
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Because
, a plenty number of
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, is coming to a unique
product
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 in the market. Still, they are not
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 in
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 particular thing because they do not maintain the services after launching the exceptionally good. They are not looking at the cost of the
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 because everyone cannot get the
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 if they desire to buy them.
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 but not least, the
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's workers
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 indicate significant contribution to the promotion of
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 because it will be determined that every person in the
company
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 is contributing to the
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 who is working as patiently. If the
company
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's owners do not care
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 the employers and do not give a salary as well as respect their work,
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 if owners launch a rare
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 in the market,
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 they will not succeed. To illustrate, A big tech-iPhones
company
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 advocate
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employer
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employees
 to give more salary and maintain
the
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 happy workplace.
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, without the role of workers, they cannot succeed in the
business
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. In conclusion, strong features
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 contribute for the achieve victory in the work,
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 as good services, cost reduction strategy, a happy workplace, and maintaining the stability of the
product
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.
Therefore
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, we cannot argue that the only way to achieve
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 in the
business
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 is by launching a unique
product
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.
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