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Should a city try to preserve its old, historic buildings or destroy them and replace them with modern buildings? What is your viewpoint on this issue?

Every
city
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 has some buildings
relating
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 to the history of that
city
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 or nation. There is a common debate about the presence of those
places
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,
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 some want to preserve whilst others think about the replacement of those historic properties.
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, I personally agree with the former statement
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 a number of reasons surround my opinion. First of all, a town should protect the aged, historic buildings as a national treasure of art, culture and past
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 of the town. The new generations can learn about their nation's history through those buildings and feel a connection to their ancestors.
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, they are evidence of a tribe's struggles and the story of development.
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, they can be a great source of information for researchers.
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, a great fort can depict the time of the king who built or lived here long ago. What is more,
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city
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the city
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 can introduce them as tourist spots
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 museums or learning centres and boosting up nation's economy. People from all over the world will come to pay a visit to those
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 regularly. So, some employers will
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 create hotels, motels, restaurants
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 so on will build. That's how people can enhance their income by doing a lot of amusement work for tourists
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thus
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 the country will be beneficial too.
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, a
city
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 can use the king's palace and the surroundings as a museum and park to attract tourists.
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, old properties are not useless if we can use them in a proper manner. They will be great
places
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 for learning or simple sightseeing
places
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 it is up to us how we treat them.

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Task Response
Your view is clear and you answer the task. In the intro, say your view. In each body, give one main idea and a short example that fits. In the end, repeat your view.
Coherence and Cohesion
Make the idea flow in a simple, clear order. Use a lead line for each part and use order words like first, also, then, finally. This helps the reader follow your plan.
Strength
Clear stance on the issue.
Strength
Gives reasons and an example.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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