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The health benefits of physical exercises are well known. Despite this, many people do not exercise regularly. What are the reasons for this? What could be done to encourage them to exercise regularly?

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General Description of Study: A quantitative experimental study using a prospective randomized trial ; the pediatric patients were distributed to one of the three groups by utilizing of sealed envelope technique which was conducted by Uyar et al. ( 2021 ) In Ankara , Turkey to explore what is the most effective method to decrease pre- operative
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 level in children, the study experiment was comparing between video games ,watching a cartoon to give simple information about the anaesthesia on the television in holding area and oral midazolam. N=134 Consecutive children conducted the experiment, ages ranging from 5 to 8 years. Initial
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 levels were evaluated by using the modified Yale Pre-operative
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 Scale (mYPAS) ;
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 after 20 minutes of intervention
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 level was measured.
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 taken on the operating table before anaesthesia induction. A Finding revealed that playing video games was more effective compared to other elements. •
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