The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

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The first line graph outlines how the electrical appliance ownership in households in a country transformed during a century commencing from 1920
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the second chart delineates how it had affected the time spent on household
work
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per week by the citizens in
this
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country. As a general trend, with the increasing number of electrical devices possessed by
families
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, their need for doing housework significantly declined. As the graph reveals, only 30
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of households in
this
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country used to have vacuum cleaners and four out of ten
families
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had washing machines in 1920. Refrigerators were
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rare electric
appliance
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appliances
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at that time. Just after two decades,
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, refrigerator possessions shoot up, and almost half of the
families
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owned these three electric items in their homes. More
families
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started to own
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devices and at the beginning of the twenty-first century, almost all households had fridges and vacuum cleaners. The washing machine was owned by more than 70% of
families
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which slowly but steadily increased till 2019. At that point, there was hardly any family without a refrigerator or vacuum cleaner. It is interesting to note that, with the increasing number of electric appliances owned by
families
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, their need for doing household
work
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like preparing meals, cleaning and washing clothes remarkably diminished.
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they used to
work
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for 50 hours a week doing
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work
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in 1920, it decreased to 20 hours in 1960 and 10 in 2019.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words work, families with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • electrical appliances
  • housework
  • time frame
  • variables
  • trends
  • significant milestones
  • turning points
  • correlation
  • reduction
  • influenced
  • societal implications
  • quality of life
  • gender roles
  • economic implications
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