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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

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The first line graph outlines how the electrical appliance ownership in households in a country transformed during a century commencing from 1920
while
 the second chart delineates how it had affected the time spent on household
work
 per week by the citizens in
this
 country. As a general trend, with the increasing number of electrical devices possessed by
families
, their need for doing housework significantly declined. As the graph reveals, only 30
percent
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 of households in
this
 country used to have vacuum cleaners and four out of ten
families
 had washing machines in 1920. Refrigerators were
a
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rare electric
appliance
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appliances
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 at that time. Just after two decades,
however
, refrigerator possessions shoot up, and almost half of the
families
 owned these three electric items in their homes. More
families
 started to own
such
 devices and at the beginning of the twenty-first century, almost all households had fridges and vacuum cleaners. The washing machine was owned by more than 70% of
families
 which slowly but steadily increased till 2019. At that point, there was hardly any family without a refrigerator or vacuum cleaner. It is interesting to note that, with the increasing number of electric appliances owned by
families
, their need for doing household
work
 like preparing meals, cleaning and washing clothes remarkably diminished.
While
 they used to
work
 for 50 hours a week doing
such
work
 in 1920, it decreased to 20 hours in 1960 and 10 in 2019.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words work, families with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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