Zoos around the world provide people with the opportunity to enjoy and learn about animals that they do not usually have the chance to see. However, despite these benefits, it is unkind to keep animals in zoos. Do you agree?
The practice of keeping
animal
under lock and key to amaze people is historical and nowadays it has become the most feasible means of visiting wild creatures. Fix the agreement mistake
animals
Although
,
for people, zoos are great sources of learning about Remove the comma
apply
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wildlife
wild life
, it is cruel to confine wild Correct your spelling
wildlife
animal
which Fix the agreement mistake
animals
are
supposed to be free. personally, I completely agree that Change the verb form
is
animals
should not be kept in confinement and in the subsequent paragraphs I will be reasoning my stands.
To begin
with, each of
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the
living organism has the right to live a free life in Correct article usage
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their
own Correct pronoun usage
its
habitats
. The term 'wild' is Fix the agreement mistake
habitat
self explanatory
and it means living or growing in the natural environmental Add a hyphen
self-explanatory
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instead
insteat
of being domesticated. Correct your spelling
instead
Therefore
, animals
are supposed to roam around forest areas where they suit most and bring out their very own nature like hunting their own food. For example
, a tiger or a lion will not behave the same in captivity as it might in the sanctuary. Therefore
, these wild animals
will gradually lose their Correct your spelling
characteristics
characteristcs
which is obviously detrimental Correct your spelling
characteristics
for
nature.
another point worth mentioning is that different Change preposition
to
animals
lives
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live
at
different climatic zones Change preposition
in
for
which it becomes difficult for Change preposition
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such
animals
to survive in the artificial environment of the zoo. For example
, white bears from polar regions where the weather is cold throughout the year,less likely to survive in the zoo as it is not fully possible to create Add an article
an environment
environment
like polar areas. Fix the agreement mistake
environments
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goes Correct article usage
The same
with
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for
the
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animals
from another extreme regions
like Sahara where Replace the adjective
another extreme region
other extreme regions
temperature
is quite high. Add an article
the temperature
Hence
, animals
from diverse areas go thorough
unlimited Correct your spelling
through
Correct your spelling
sufferings
sufferrings
in the zoo which is absolutely brutal.
To conclude, Correct your spelling
suffering
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keeping
keeing
animal Correct your spelling
keeping
under
captivity just for Change preposition
in
the
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apply
amausement
is a merciless act of Correct your spelling
amusement
human
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humans
what
must be Correct word choice
that
close
down in order to ensure animal safety and ecosystem sustainability.Replace the word
closed
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