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Some students nowadays prefer to study online through online courses. What are the advantages and disadvantages of learning online?

#students #study #courses
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In recent years, most
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tasks were changed because of the Internet. Teachers started teaching
students
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 through online classes. Some people believe that going to
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school is
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 effective way of studying. As far as I am concerned, I think studying on
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 is better. Both studying on
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 and online studying have some similarities.
Firstly
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,
students
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 can gain knowledge from both methods, since teachers teach
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 content.
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, they
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 can make friends in class, because they always have
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discussion
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 to talk about issues, questions and so on, which can help them find friends who have the same interests.
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, learning on
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 is still very different from online studying.
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 of all, the disappearance of physical contact among
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 creates a lower level of communication and participation, but studying on
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 can avoid
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 problem and have
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 discussion in the classroom, which can widen the perspective of
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 and enhance their teamwork
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.
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,
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 on
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 allows
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 to experience different local cultures, languages and so on.
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 may
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 that the graduates have more competitive in the job market, because these
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experiences
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 may attract
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 attention.
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, online study is flexible in terms of time and location, so
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 can study anywhere with internet access, and
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 saves a lot of money in terms of housing and commuting,
On the other hand
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,
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 who choose
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 on
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 can help
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build their own lifestyles. Because they do not live with their parents anymore, so many problems in life they have to solve by themselves, which helps them to be more independent. At the same time,
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 can exchange problems they encounter in their studies and lives with their classmates at any time in real life. All in all, There are benefits to studying online, but for
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, it is better for them to study at school
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • online courses
  • flexibility
  • scheduling
  • access
  • wide range
  • learn at your own pace
  • lower costs
  • self-discipline
  • time management skills
  • geographical restrictions
  • limited face-to-face interaction
  • hands-on experience
  • distractions
  • self-motivation
  • discipline
  • networking opportunities
  • dependence on technology
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