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Cambridge 16, Test 2 In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is that? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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These days, many companies in their advertising insist that their
goods
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 are new in some aspects. Most of them do
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 to persuade consumers to buy their
products
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. In my opinion, it is a positive improvement that can increase the number of customers significantly. The reason why organizations claim
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 their
advertisements
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 that their
goods
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 are the latest in some way is that they probably want to introduce them to
people
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 better to make them buy. Advertising
provide
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 consumers with a lot of useful information about new aspects of commodities. Obviously, if consumers have enough data about a new product, they may choose and buy it more easily.
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, advertising help businesses
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convince
people
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 to buy their new
goods
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.
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, the Apple company sells its modern
products
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 by introducing
their
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its
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 new functions in
advertisements
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. So
people
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 can be aware
about
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of
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 them and buy them more confidently. I think, emphasizing
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apply
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new
products
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 in some aspects
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of
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 advertising is a positive development for businesses. Because
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 makes organizations get better results in the competitive market. When companies focus on the new features of their commodities in
advertisements
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, they somehow indicate
its
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their
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 advantages over other
companies’
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companies
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products
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.
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, showing these benefits make more individuals buy from that company.
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,
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corporation whose product is shampoo, if it adds a softening feature to that shampoo with a special technology and shows
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 in its
advertisements
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,
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 to being one step ahead of its competitors due to
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 new feature, it will
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 have more customers and gets more profit. In conclusion, most businesses convince more
people
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 to purchase from them by highlighting new features of their
goods
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 in advertising and
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 leads to positive improvements by
risingraising
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rising raising
 their sales.
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