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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible othe in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe thar some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely.

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These days humans are faced with a diverse range of
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informations
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information
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 in academic or
science
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 research. Some individuals assume that so preponderant are these
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data
dates
datas
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data
 and
people
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 should have access to them freely.
however
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,others believe that these
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informations
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 are too valuable and important to
shared
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 freely.In my opinion, I
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perceive
percieve
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perceive
 that each point of view has prods and cons.in
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To begin
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 with, the way of sharing
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informations
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 are
enromously
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enormously
 vital and it has several aspects on
people
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's lives. Freely sharing
information
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 increase the number of educated
people
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 in
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society.
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,the more
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educated
educuted
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educated
People
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 are,the more
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advantageous
advantagous
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advantageous
 it is for
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secity
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security
city
.
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,costless access to
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data
datas
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data
 levels up
people
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's self-
rearning
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learning
 enthusiasm.
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,
in
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 social media websites
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 as Google or Youtube,
people
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 can search
about
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 a topic and learn it by themselves.
On the other hand
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, the person who developed the
information
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 should gain a profit.
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, he or she will
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loose
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lose
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 the passion to
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develop
develope
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develop
 a new one.
In addition
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,
arother
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another
 matter
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 worth noticing is in order to gain
an
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information
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information
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 so many costs need to be taken and the most preponderant one is time.
for example
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, some
people
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 spend years gathering and collecting data and the cost is significant. So, the
information
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distributing
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in
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from
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 free sources would be unfair to the owner and copyright regulation should be existed under these circumstances. To sum up, there are various types of
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informations
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 in scientific research and other branches. There are
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advantages
advantageous
advantagous
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advantages
 and
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disadvantageous
disadvantages
disadvantagous
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disadvantages
in
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 sharing
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data
datas
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data
 freely. I myself believe that it is entirely up to the developer.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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