Some people think painting and drawing are as important as other subjects, they should be compulsory in the high school education. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

For the time being, a large number of people claim that high
school
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hours of the painting. On the one way, I agree with the statement, because drawing improves
children
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moreover
, pupils become less
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. On the other way, I disagree, because we have more important
subjects
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to our career. On the one hand, nowadays many
children
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because technologies disturb them. Actually, they do not have a strong imagination, because they adopted to find the
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the internet without thinking.
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pupil will not have an idea, because he adopted to write an essay from the internet without his opinion, because of the fact that
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the
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drawing. From my point of view,
to paint
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pictures,
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is so enjoyable and it can prevent stress.
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, if the government increases lessons
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painting, it will be useful for offspring, because in the future they will live without stress and depression. These two opinions can prevent
children
's depression and
increase
imagination too. It is
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, that in the future we will
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need
subjects
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important than art,
such
as math, physics, chemistry and so on. In my opinion,
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governments
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goverments
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governments
should
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of science
subjects
, because I believe that a small part of
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will be an artist. I mean, offspring should study science
subjects
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these
subjects
.
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this
profession demands physics, math and pi.
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case, people will not need
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and
drawing
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. In conclusion, I believe that all governments will
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number of art
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because it
develop
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children
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. But I disagree that drawing and painting will be needed in all jobs.
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