In many places, the crime rate is increasing. the causes of increasing crime? What is the best way to deal with this problem?

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the world develop rapidly, and at the same time the rate of crime number
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growing fast. Some people might get confused and
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why
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happened. To my personal opinion, the main reason will be as
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electronic technology
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life, more young teenagers start to touch and learn something they shouldn't see at
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age. The current age stage of most teenagers
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build their world view and being impulsion. So they might
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the wrong messages from some rough stuff videos or websites online, which could stimulate their mind and
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them
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copy the same
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to response things. So
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juvenile crime
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increase
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rapdily
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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