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Some young people are leaving the countryside to live in cities and towns, leaving only old people in the countryside. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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A part of
the
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 teenagers
abandon
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 the rural area, in order to live in cities, which results in leaving
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elder people alone.
This
 essay argues that the migration of the younger generation from the countryside has a bad impact on development.
Firstly
,
this
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secondly
, the loss of any potential for future growth. When the 18-25 years old’s leave their local rural areas
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for a city
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to chase a dream, they let the old people
work
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 employment jobs require
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manual
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, and the elder people just can’t keep up with it,
although
 the youth could easily use their power.
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, many families who are in the farming field have to sell their businesses, because children are leaving the house as soon as they have the chance.
Furthermore
, the fastest developing generation is leaving without understanding that they are needed somewhere else and that nothing will
work
 efficiently without them. Only the youngsters have the power needed and the ideas which can help in growing the rural area. Not one time have I seen how something stops working so well
,
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 because the old mind is not as good as the fresh mind. In conclusion, the rise
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 the average age in
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rural places has brought to
less
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workplaces
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work places
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and
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to the stoppage of any future rise.
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