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WHAT ARE THE ADVANTAGES AND DISADVANTAGES OF LEAVING YOUR COUNTRY TO LIVE OR STUDY ABROAD?

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The cooperation between nations results in more opportunities to study abroad and
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 in foreign countries.
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 it has some drawbacks, I am of the opinion that its benefits are more significant On the one hand, it's undeniable that leaving our country to live or study abroad has some cons. It's irrefutable that when going to a brand new country, people mostly feel overwhelmed with its daily
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, cultures
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daily driving if you don't have enough knowledge about
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, your performance will be decreased significantly if that situation hasn't been solved.
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 disadvantages. It's undoubted that interacting with new cultures is a good way to more understand each other. Cooperating is crucial in the current era and it should be widened for all industries. So having a good relationship with buddies from other nations
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 you lots of benefits which you can't gain if they are domestic. Another compelling reason for
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 would be improved in other countries. In the
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professional quality. Ultimately, your capacity could be gone up
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 quality. In conclusion, while going abroad has some limitations, it seems to me that its benefit is more remarkable because of the above-mentioned reasons.
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