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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

#minutes #topic #internet #books #air #tickets #groceries
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is
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 these days that
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online shopping became more popular than ever. the question is what is the
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impact
impcat
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impact
 of online shopping on our
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lives
life
lifes
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? in the essay I am going to
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discuss
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discuss
 the
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positive
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positive
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online shopping. In terms of advantages, buying things online makes our
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lives
life
lifes
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lives
 easier.The main reason given to support
this
 claim is that you can purchase anything from the comfort of your sofa using your phone or
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laptop
labtop
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laptop
.
Moreover
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everything
everthing
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everything
 could be delivered to your doorstep quickly in
day
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a day
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 or two and you can search for anything from pens to cars with one click.
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, online shopping can save
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a lot
alot
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a lot
 of time that was wasted
in
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transportation
transportion
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transportation
 to and from the stores and waiting in lines during peak hours at the malls and grocery stores.
Also
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 you can share
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pictures
 of
your
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the things you want to buy with your
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friends
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friends
 and family and take
thier
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their
opinans
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opinions
. One of the negative sides of
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virtual
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virtual
 shopping
that
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 your purchased items might get lost in the mail.
Secondly
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 it increases
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spending when people tend to buy things they do not need.
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because
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because
the
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 easy access to
stores
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 offers and sales. I
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believe
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belive
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believe
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 online shopping is one of the best tools
could
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that could
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 be used to improve the quality of our
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lives
life
lifes
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 since it
help
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 us to utilize our time and money
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efficiently
efficientlly
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efficiently
. In
conclusion
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 the advantages of
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online shopping overcome the problems of online shopping.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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