Some people believe that if people are allowed to buy guns, they will be able to protect themselves and the crime rate can be lower. To what extent do you agree or disagree？

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I think if we have a chance to buy a

gun

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it will be very nice

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us because these days

crimes

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rates are higher day by day and if we are weak or not strong enough we will die because of bad people .That's why we need a

gun

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to protect ourselves from thieves and others we can not see. In the following

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I will tell you my opinions.

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of all, having a

gun

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in everybody is too dangerous because if we can not control our anger or if

you

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are a high temper person

you

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will use that

gun

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and

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which

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can be caused many accidents.

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, if you are a dad or mom

may be

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someone

you

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child doesn't obey your words and they

did

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rudeness more than your anger level and

then

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you can not control yourself and you are using a pistol accidentally .

Then

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your children can be due and you will definitely go to

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jail.At

last

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, your family will be broken and

rest

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of your life can be filled with sadness .

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, guns are too expensive to buy.Everyone cannot afford to buy a pistol.And

this

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topic is really

concerned

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to the government because all democratic citizens have

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permission from their government and they can easily

bought

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buy

be bought

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what they want and any

kinds

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kind

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of guns they want.So if we can stop

government

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the government

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to control buying of a

gun

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it is really nice . To conclude, there

are

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good and bad

situation

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topic but

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with the topic.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

263 words

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Fully explain your ideas

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