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In some countries, m any more people are choosing to live alone nowadays than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Education
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 is the backbone of a nation. To build a better country,
people
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 must have to get proper
education
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 and the
government
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 should be monitoring the
education
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 system so that everyone can get opportunities. Upcoming paragraph, I will illustrate why the
education
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 system should be controlled by the
government
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 of that country
instead
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 of a private organization.
Firstly
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, the
government
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 can understand what type of
education
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 system have to impose depending on the demand of the situation of that time.
However
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, private organizations can not identify the sort of change they have to change for the greater interest of the nation because they are not in the group of policy making.
For example
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, the Chinese
government
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 understood that technical
education
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 is very prominent in the modern world.
Therefore
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, he decided to teach his student about technical subjects so that they could contribute to their economy to a greater extent. And now we see the result in our eyes that the Chinese are the world's number one economic country in the world.
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, the
government
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 faces fewer difficulties to impose new things in different sectors than private organizations because they can handle it very smartly.
Government
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 can persuade their
people
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 to do something whereas nongovernment companies can not do it.
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, South Korean
people
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 must take two years of military training within thirty years old for their safety during the war. If
this
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 is imposed by any nongovernment organization,
people
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 can not obey their command.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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