Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Advertising
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Does advertising
gain
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gains
a
successful at persuading Correct article usage
apply
people
to buy products?
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.
There
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These
two
arguments about advertising, which grows nowadays. Some Add a missing verb
are two
people
agree, however
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,however
other’s
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others
belief
that advertising is something that we Replace the word
believe
not
pay attention Change the verb form
do not
did not
anymore
.
In the Change preposition
to anymore
first
view, people
would like to agree with how the
advertising blind Correct article usage
apply
people
to own
products from the companies. One of Wrong verb form
owning
evidence
showed
by Change the form of the verb
shown
the
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apply
Instagram
. People
do competition gaining much
followers because Change the quantifier
many
of
having many followers are profitable. Change preposition
apply
Instagram
is one of advertising
tools which is Add an article
the advertising
significant
popular. Change the adjective
significantly
Moreover
producers create many Add a comma
,Moreover
of
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apply
creatively
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creative
poster
to post to Fix the agreement mistake
posters
Instagram
feed for gaining more Correct pronoun usage
their Instagram
people
closed
to their product.
There is other Change the form of the verb
close
evidence
why advertising is the key for
the companies’ Change preposition
to
victorious
. Replace the word
victory
This
evidence
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is show
show
by the successful Change the form of the verb
shows
Youtubers
who claim Correct your spelling
YouTubers
their
rich from endorses. In Replace the word
they're
they are
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their
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apply
used
as Add a missing verb
is used
products
advertising media.
The Fix the agreement mistake
product
second
opinion is the opposite arguments
for it. Fix the agreement mistake
argument
People
beliefs
that Replace the word
believe
the
promotion is just formal Correct article usage
apply
activities
for them which can’t prove Fix the agreement mistake
activity
it
effective for their business. Correct pronoun usage
apply
Moreover
it’s difficult to find Add a comma
,Moreover
evidence
that their sale success because of the advertisement. There is
no straight Correct subject-verb agreement
are
of
links that proved it. Change preposition
apply
Furthermore
, people
see advertising as a commonly
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common
things
because they already know Fix the agreement mistake
thing
what
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apply
its
purposeReplace the word
it's
it is
.
They even more carefully skim Add a missing verb
is.
about
the advertising content Change preposition
apply
in
their social media.
In my Change preposition
on
views
, I Fix the agreement mistake
view
am agree
that promotion is Change the verb form
agree
substantial
factor. Even if the Add an article
a substantial
advertisement
media Replace the word
advertising
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has changes
changes
from Replace the word
changed
the
television and radio before to Youtube and Correct article usage
apply
Instagram
now advertisement is a way for convincing people
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