ielts 8 test 1 : some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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, many
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believe that parents should provide some
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to their
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about how to become good
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in the public, while some
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think that
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knowledge
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should be learnt from
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. In the following paragraph, both of
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this view
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will be discussed in detail.
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how to become good
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in the public,
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this
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is a basic skill in our daily life which everybody should have.
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, it should come from their own family,
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, how each parent
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about manners in society or some parents might be taught about how to be attractive in our daily life and so on. These all skills should be from their own family since they were young. In fact, some
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might
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and copied their parents' personalities as well.
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, someone argues that
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is the place to teach about how to become good
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in daily life.
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spent time in
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seven to eight hours per day.
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, schools should provide their
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with
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knowledge
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during the day.
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school
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a school
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might create some activity which relates to how to become good members in the public and to have some interaction with each
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children
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the end of the
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teacher should describe
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the conclusion to their student. To
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up, I can see the point that schools are the best places to learn
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, but if we don't start with their own families, kids will lose part of their confidence and
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about how to behave effectively in public.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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