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The demand for food is increasing worldwide.Why has it happened?What measures could the international community take to improve the situation?

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The insistence
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food
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 around the world has gained day by day.There are many reasons for it.
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 of the main reasons is population growth.
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 the international community can not do much to improve the situation,they bear the brunt of it.In
this
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 essay,we will explore together how the world nation can easily and effectively improve
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 position.
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 with,population growth is through migration.
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 why every country has a high demand for
food
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.
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,in the past five years,with 22,6% the population of Bahrain has grown
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,followed by Niger and Falkland Islands,having raised over 20%.
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,changing weather patterns and natural disasters led to low crop yields and from that citizens and local labourers suffered mainly.
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,there is a plethora of foodstuff corporations that dominate the aboriginal market without giving
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opportunities for farmers and
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 at unfair prices. In order to solve these problems, the local and international communities need to unite. Citizens are expected to do only
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 thing: not waste
food
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 and buy the products they need.
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,in the United States,almost 40
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 of the produce
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,which shows that more
food
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 needs to be grown in the face of
food
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 shortages.
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,in some developed countries wastage of meals is
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 of
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 for the world.
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,there are countless factors that influence
food
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 needs. In conclusion,I would like to remind you that you should not use anything more than
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necessary
neccessary
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necessary
.
This
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 simple and small reason can turn into big
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one
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 day,so it is the duty of us citizens to prevent it.

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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