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Some people believe that after the child begins his/her schooling their teachers will have more influence than their parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #child #teachers #influence #parents
It is indeed
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 fact that after
parents
, teachers are the most important and influential
person
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people
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 in a
children
's life. In
this
 essay, I completely disagree with
this
 statement.
Firstly
,
children
 spend most of their time with their
parents
.
Parents
 due to give birth
their
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 sons and daughters in the world and
also
children
 saw their mum and dad
the
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first
 time. They can teach their daughters and sons many important things like how to behave,
difference
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 between right
or
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 wrong, traditions, religion, values and so on.
For example
, their mum and dad feed a baby, playing toys together and their
parents
 read aloud a tale before they go to sleep at night.
Secondly
,
parents
 can show direction to their
children
 and make them better responsible
individual
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to
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society.
Therefore
,
this
 leads to creating a better world for living because the future of the nation is on mature individuals. The result of
this
 is a time to use to take care
and
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 teach
to
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them to
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 be good people when they grow up.
On the other hand
, tutors are
well trained
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 to control their pupils.
Thus
, teachers can identify
right
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 potential inside the child and motivate them to achieve their goals. They
also
 can give better advice on career choice to the
children
 because they know what is a child really want in their life. In conclusion, I admit that teachers are helpful in career, selection, motivate
to
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the
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boys and girls and
they
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help
to
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the
offsprings
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offspring
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 to achieve their goals, but
parents
 bring up their
children
 the best way and they can help
to
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their
children
 achieve
to
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high
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a high
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score
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 in their future life.
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