People think that living in multi-storey buildings is rather than their own home. What do you think is right?

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Humans which live in the world, want

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their comfortable. In the family, job, home and other things. Especially

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the home. Now modern tense is even being built homes.

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in foreign lands, we can see

multi-storey

residential buildings because one of the most convenient sides a

multi-storey

houses

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is the heat the house, heating

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is not a problem, because they are not enough large as well as not wide. In the meantime, I have to say that there are

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children's playgrounds for the children

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homeowners. I think many humans

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want to live

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houses

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. There are

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popular courtyards

such

multi-storey

houses

, the best part of which is that they are very large,

spacious

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, with a private garage and garden.

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houses

anyway have a basement and several bathrooms. In the garden, you can plant anything you want or if you want build one resident. Another advantage is that if you plant all kinds of fruits and vegetables in your garden and you can get a lot of benefits from it,

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for your own food, you can eat natural and clean products that you have grown yourself, and if you buy them in large quantities, you can not only get financial benefits. But

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, I like the

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, they

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interfere with the slightest noise. After analyzing both sides, I choose the courtyard because I have lived in a

multi-storey

house before and it really caused me problems. I love my current yard and I never trade it for any other house.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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In conclusion
To conclude
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Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
14Grammar mistakes
 

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267 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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People think that living in multi-storey buildings is rather than their own home. What do you think is right?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Millions of dollars are spent on space research every year. Some people argue that the money should be spent on improving living standards on Earth. Do you agree or disagree?

In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message

Nowadays it has become increasingly popular to shop online rather than too shop in-store. Is this a positive or negative development?

in spite of the advances made in agriculture,many people around the world still go hungry. why is this the case? what can be done about this problem?

Public celebrations( such as national days, festivals, etc) are held in most countries. Theses are often quite expensive and some people say that governments should spend money on more useful things Do you agree or disagree?