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The illustrations demonstrate the life cycle of salmon which is a species of large fish. Overall, their life initiates from an egg in slow-moving water in a
river
 to
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mature one which lay
eggs
. In the beginning,
eggs
 are laid among small stones where mostly covered by reeds in the upper
river
.
This
 period lasts approximately 5 to 6 months in the
river
 till the length of the newborn fish reaches 3 -8 cm which is called Fry in
this
 stage. The Fry
then
, move towards the lower
river
 with fast flowing where they choose to inhibit for about 4 years. They now have a length of 12 – 15 cm and are called Smolt. Smolts migrate to the open sea to be mature enough to be fertilized. After 5 years of living in the open sea now they are adults with a size of 70 to 76 cm from the head to the tail. Adult salmon are ready to lay
eggs
, so again they complete their life cycle by moving to the upper
river
 where
eggs
 can be accommodated by slow-moving water.
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