As children become adults, their social behaviour changes in some ways. What are the main differences between young children's social behaviour and that of adults? To what extent are the changes that take place good?

When children become adults, they get to know more
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more influences
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different
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and platforms, and
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has a general impact on how they behave towards
people
. One very important example from my point of view is their level of self-esteem. When children grow up, start making experiences in the fields they are interested in,
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getting out of high school, which suppressed them in one form of society that they are supposed to fit in, they are starting to feel
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free, being surrounded by the
people
that have the same passion as themselves. And one important aspect is that they get more independent, which makes them behave differently. From my point of
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those changes are very important and part of the process of life. At some point in life, you need to separate yourself and your opinions from the ones that your parents have and start living your life. Parents give a great
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, but you just develop in different directions
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them, and
that is
good and important. Maybe a child was very shy and had a hard time talking to
people
, but when
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started following
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passions,
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and meeting
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more
people
sharing these passions,
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got more
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more
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ease to
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to
people
about
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projects, which just changes the general attitude in talking to
people
. The change of social behaviour is a long process that never ends and that
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influenced by every person you find on its way.
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