As children become adults, their social behaviour changes in some ways. What are the main differences between young children's social behaviour and that of adults? To what extent are the changes that take place good?

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When children become adults, they get to know more
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has a general impact on how they behave towards
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. One very important example from my point of view is their level of self-esteem. When children grow up, start making experiences in the fields they are interested in,
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getting out of high school, which suppressed them in one form of society that they are supposed to fit in, they are starting to feel
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free, being surrounded by the
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that have the same passion as themselves. And one important aspect is that they get more independent, which makes them behave differently. From my point of
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those changes are very important and part of the process of life. At some point in life, you need to separate yourself and your opinions from the ones that your parents have and start living your life. Parents give a great
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, but you just develop in different directions
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good and important. Maybe a child was very shy and had a hard time talking to
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, but when
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started following
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passions,
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sharing these passions,
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got more
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projects, which just changes the general attitude in talking to
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. The change of social behaviour is a long process that never ends and that
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influenced by every person you find on its way.
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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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