The maps below shows a coal mine and its redevelopment into a visitor attraction site

The maps below shows a coal mine and its redevelopment into a visitor attraction site
Given are two maps illustrating the layouts of a coal mine before and after redesigning it into a tourist trap place.
Overall
, as shown in the figure, except for the location of the roofless garage in the southwest corner and the northern mine gate, all sites have been destroyed.
Further
, previously, the mine entrance was where the workers entered, but now,the entrance is where the visitors come in. In the past, There was an office in the northwest corner of the mining town.
Moreover
, the employees’ changing room was exactly in the lower part of the office.
Nonetheless
, later, there has been constructed a museum at the expense of ruining the office and the dressing room.
Furthermore
, in the previous mining town’s layout, there was a central medical room which later, has been replaced with a focal cafe’. In the former scheme, there were two eastern waste pit districts in the new scheme, which have completely been removed and
instead
of them, a rectangular driving track for lorries, a picnic sector and a playground have been established.
In addition
, a footpath surrounded the cafe’, the track and the picnic part.
Finally
, the old southern truck garage has totally been demolished.
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