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Computers are being used more and more in education. Some people say that this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences. Discuss both sides of this argument and then give your own opinion.

Computers
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major
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 impact on humankind. People have different
thought
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thoughts
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 about the result of
computers
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, which definitely has pros and cons
of
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to
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 their
usages
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usage
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. Despite many advantages, there are certain negative results comes in
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society.
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the good and bad outcomes to understand. In my opinion, positive development in
computers
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 overweighs the negatives.
Computers
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 are
integral
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 part of our lives in today’s world, Life
in
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 unimaginable without
computers
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, as they serve the purpose of exchanging diversified information across
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. It becomes easy for anyone
communicate
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to communicate
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 with relatives, by sitting
at
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in
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 the comfort of their homes. As per
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 recent survey, conducted by Harvard University, Most of the people in
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,
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having
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 internet facilities are using
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a computer
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computer
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computers
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 for communication.
Also
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,
Computers
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plays
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 a major role in
industry
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the industry
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, which saves
substantial
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 amount of travel
time
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,
energy
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the energy
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 of people and cost
of
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corporates. All corporates are providing
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laptops to their employees, which saves
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time
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 and energy, and
further
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 results in high productivity.
In addition
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 to
this
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, Humans sitting in their homes, get
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information
with in
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within
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 fraction of
seconds
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 from the search engines like Google or Bing and
attending
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the
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online
classes
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, which helps
person
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a person
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 to improve their knowledge without travelling. During the pandemic
time
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, even though
pupil
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pupils
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are
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 not able to attend
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classes
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 physically due to multiple government
restriction
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restrictions
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, children are attending
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school
classes
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 without impacting their studies. According to
survey
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a survey
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New
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 York times, Most
of
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the
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student studies did not
impacted
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 across
globe
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, due
online
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classes
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attending
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 via
computers
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 or phones.
Hence
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computers
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 are
important
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an important
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 part of
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the human
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human
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humans
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, which marks a strong impact. On the other side, there
is
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 some negatives associated with
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computer
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the computer
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 as well. Due to
high
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the high
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 usage of
computers
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, Juvenile screen
time
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 is increased, which
further
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 deteriorates
the
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 health of them.
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 will lead to
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addiction
of
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among
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 kids. According to
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recent polls by
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 application,
Juvenile
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 are spending
good
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a good
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 amount of
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in
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watching videos or spending
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 on
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computer
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 activities, which declines their health.
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,
Pupil’s
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pupils’
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 physical activities are reduced, which increases their stress level and less exposure to
environment
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. To illustrate
this
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, it is noticed in residential societies parks are empty as compared to
pre-pandemic
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 period.
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,
negatives
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 impacts are noticeable in society which leads to multiple health problems. In conclusion,
Computers
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 has impacted our
life
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 in one and another way. While there are pros and cons of using the
computer
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by
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children. I personally feel, there are excellent merits over demerits.

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